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IDProjectCategoryLast Update
0005472Valley 1Suggestion - UI IdeasJan 26, 2012 7:53 am
ReporterGrimerX Assigned ToChris_McElligottPark  
Status assignedResolutionopen 
Product Version0.562 
Summary0005472: Suggest a text pass in the 'wind shelter mission' map overview
Description(Following the guideline that you're not done editing until 20% of the words have been removed)

"The Guardian Ilari have detected a stable tranquil pocket in the vortex at this location. With effort, they can make a shelter from that pocket that will drive back the ubiquitous windstorms that make monsters more powerful in that area. Currently, however, the presence of powerful monsters in a nearby tower threatens to destabilize the pocket and the creation of the shelter. If you enter the tower and defeat those monsters, the Ilari will be able to take care of the rest"

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"The Ilari have detected a stable pocket in the vortex at this location. With effort, they can construct a shelter in the pocket, driving back the ubiquitous windstorms that make monsters more formidable in the surrounding area. Currently, the presence of powerful monsters in a nearby tower threatens to destabilize the pocket and prevents creation of the shelter. If you enter the tower and defeat those monsters, the Ilari will take care of the rest"

NOTE -- take out "threatens to destabilize the pocket" unless you plan to actually remove the wind shelter if the player fails/lets too much time elapse.

NOTE -- It is 3:11am here, I will judge my quality later today.
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Internal WeightPolish Tweak

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Issue History

Date Modified Username Field Change
Jan 26, 2012 6:12 am GrimerX New Issue
Jan 26, 2012 7:53 am tigersfan Internal Weight => Polish Tweak
Jan 26, 2012 7:53 am tigersfan Assigned To => Chris_McElligottPark
Jan 26, 2012 7:53 am tigersfan Status new => assigned